Poor Imp

That was brilliant - even in the specific sense of the word; light - or enlightening. Deft - sometimes ironic - balance of the fetus' questions, comments against those of ...

I know this a bloody year old - but it's such a good read. It’s dusty and dark, filled with murky substances that were once imaginative sprites, and now just ...

An intriguing beginning...you've already raised string of questions in my mind. It's was pleasant also, to read something not flooded in small structural mistakes. You've a good sense of the ...

This was a very compelling read - disconnect, dissonant - and yet in structure intentionally allowing all to flow together. I certainly can't make any comments as to traditional form. ...

That was brilliantly amusing. ^_^ As Dusk says - I don't have anything particular to note in the negative (not that I'd need to). When the proofreader woke up, he ...

READ THIS. THIS IS IMPORTANT. For all of you who read Dream Deep's Pop Culture essay should read this. For those of you who didn't comment on Pop Culture , ...

It makes a very good journal entry - it seems to honestly reflect things you've thought about, but most of all reflect feeling . Every word tells of a world ...

This might make a very effective prologue. I was drawn in by the beginning description. But you've got it all massed in one paragraph - even dialogue. It would be ...

I liked it. The stacatto rythm there seemed particularly apt - though I'm sure I missed some allusions (family-wise). It told a story. And I think the emotion with the ...

...your paradise in a box..how...perfect. This seemed to draw it all together; this was the theme. I won't go on a disparate or tight critique - Timjim has done it ...

I was very intrigued by the title - it struck me right off. ^_^ Then the opening line couldn't help but prompt to ask...what dream? Why only one? What's up? ...

The polysyllabic words (as Jack notes) are a bit stunning at first. Afer a couple of rereadings ( :wink: ) I thought that they set the tone well, bewildering complexity. ...

That so much fun to read; cracked me up. Apparently, the prince had stepped out of his room and an assassin ready to shoot . My idiotic friend had gotten ...

Hey Shadow -- interesting idea, and you've got a good eye, I think, for continuity. My most vehement complaint would be the dwelling in the past. I think the beginning ...

I had a lot of fun reading a rather darkly amused way. It's got a staccatto tone, creepy with the interjected 'voices' and the light-hearted teenage banter. I haven't read ...